Before we can accept this application, we'd like to ask you to fix some grammatical errors in your sample. The sample keeps jumping tense. We'd like it to have one consistent tense. Also there are several places where commas replace periods, or periods are absent where they shouldn't be, interrupting the flow of reading. For instance: Yet, Lucy offers no response, she didn't think such a loud person deserved any response, instead opting to spring to her feet and slowly shuffle past the human beside her.

Please repost the sample with these errors fixed. There is no need to make any other changes.